Thursday, August 8, 2019
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Kia Ora Daniel!, First of all great piece of work. I really like how you added what room would be the game room. I also really like what things you want in the game room. I think you could try to use more examples and explain stuff a bit more.
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Mya
Hi Daniel,
ReplyDeleteI also love the idea of having a PS4 at school it would be super fun. I also liked that we could do this if we have finished our work instead of just going at any time. Next time could you at the start explain what you are persuading someone for and if you put it in room 8 we would we go for Kiwi Can.
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Nice work Daniel you did a very good job on your persuasive writing. I like the way you wrote why you want a game room in room 8 also the thing I found out was that when I was reading your writing I saw that you were trying hard to persuade Mr Norman. From Heavenly
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Daniel! I really liked how you added some pictures in the start so people know what your going to talk about and your hooking the reader in. Next time I think you should add more reasons and fix your spelling.
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